I Can't Figure It - Second Draft!

After gaining feedback from both of our teacehers, we decided to cut the apartments scene out the video, as it had no relevance to the story. After continuous debating between our group we have came to a conclusion of, re-filming the apartment scene, to show Chanan receiving the keys to the apartment, which will connote that he has already been signed and has been give the apartment as gift, to show his success. On the other hand we have an idea of, Me and Chanan, arranging to meet up after finding his contact details, with he Demo disk I purchased, for a meal or a quick drink at a bar. Here we will show me offering Chanan a record deal and having Chanan signs some papers, to show that he has signed a contract for the record label. This will connote the first step, to his successful future.

We were also considering using another instrumental, which is a remix of 'Power' by Kanye West, which was also produced by Chanan, as i diagetic sound, for the 'car' scene. However, after comments were given by the teachers, it was suggested that, this may cause confusion, with the original track. As the audience may not understand why the songs has changed or which songs is the original track that was intended to be promoted through the music video. So we deiced to scrap the ideas, so that its a lot clearer for the audience.

Here is our second draft. Below. (comments are welcome)

Untitled from ricken ram on Vimeo.

Below is the remix of 'Power' by Kanye West made by Chanan

POWER RMX 1 by ricken_ram-1